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Copy Arena · how the winning copy was chosen

Copy Arena — Results

For each page, three copy variants were written in Emily's voice and scored against a rubric. The top-scoring variant became the live page. Real testimonials only — nothing invented.

Scored 0–10 on: Voice fit · Clarity · Audience resonance · Persuasion · Honesty (no over-claiming). Target: 8.5+. All three winners scored 9.4.

$99 · 14-Day Unlimited Intro

Audience: newcomers / lapsed. Proof matched: beginner-confidence, busy-schedule, strength.
Variant A · Winner ✦

"Start where you are. We'll coach you from there."

No-shame on-ramp + no-decision structure.

Variant B

"Training that fits the life you actually have."

Busy schedule + supportive coaching.

Variant C

"Give yourself two weeks to feel stronger."

Strength gains + confidence + community.

VariantVoiceClarityAudiencePersuasionHonestyOverall
A Winner9.49.49.39.19.69.4
B9.19.29.39.09.59.2
C9.09.19.08.99.59.1
Why A won: keeps the strongest no-shame on-ramp, makes the offer unmistakable, and leaves room to prove it with real beginner, schedule and strength testimonials.
See it on the review page →

Longevity 60+

Audience: adults 60+. Proof matched: older members, own-pace, injury modification (Cynthia B. at 77, Carla O.).
Variant A · Winner ✦

"Build strength for the life you want to keep living."

Independence + own pace + injury modifications.

Variant B

"Get stronger at a pace that respects your body."

Own pace + customization + attention.

Variant C

"Feel stronger, steadier, and more capable."

Strength for real life + confidence.

VariantVoiceClarityAudiencePersuasionHonestyOverall
A Winner9.49.39.59.29.69.4
B9.29.39.49.19.69.3
C9.09.09.18.89.59.0
Why A won: leads with independence and capability, then uses matched 60+ proof to remove the two biggest objections — "Will it be too hard?" and "Can they work around my body?"
See the long-form version →

Win-Back / Reactivation

Audience: lapsed members. Proof matched: loved the coaching/community, got stronger, easy to stick to.
Variant A · Winner ✦

"Come back without making it a big thing."

Removes the awkwardness of returning.

Variant B

"Pick the thread back up."

Accountability + coaches + no-decision workouts.

Variant C

"Remember why it worked."

Emotional recall for prior members.

VariantVoiceClarityAudiencePersuasionHonestyOverall
A Winner9.59.49.59.29.69.4
B9.29.19.38.99.59.2
C9.08.89.18.89.59.0
Why A won: removes the awkwardness of returning, keeps the CTA simple, and supports the emotional promise with real member language around strength, consistency, coaching and community.
See the long-form version →
📊 Long-form pages: the four long-form rebuilds (over-60, gym, 14-day intro, win-back) are being scored against the same rubric now — those results will appear here too. Target for all: 8.5+, kept to a similar length as the originals (not over-written).